This week we are continuing writing an adventure story with an underground setting. We are working hard to create a story that is exciting and suspenseful, using lots of description to show how our character feels in an unusual and creepy setting. We are also trying our best to add cliff hangers!
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ReplyDeleteMy super sentence
ReplyDeleteThe trees in the forest were tall, naked with curling branches that made your spine shiver. There were birds squawking evilly like eagles.
I love your words
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My super sentence.
ReplyDeleteWhen Alex woke up, she found herself in an untidy, gloomy cellar with bones all over the floor , which looked like human bones! There were chains all over the floor and walls. You could tell she was frightened because she was biting her bottom lip.
I love your super sentence
DeleteI really love bit when the bones was on the floor it makes the reader get a picture of what you are wright about and even I can get a picture of what you are doing about well done for that amazing , fantastic and enjoyable sentence.
My super sentence
ReplyDeleteAs Rosie crept slowly into the old, mould and dark forest. Rosie had light blue eyes, long blond hair, tall and skinny and eyes full of amazement. You could
tell she was because of her face expression.
He woke up really muddy in a giant spider web. Then he broke the web and fell into a big pile of mud. He saw beautiful bats and red eyed rats. You could tell he had beetles on him
ReplyDeleteHe crept nervously around because he was scared and He wondered where he was then a cockroach crept on his sweaty neck.
ReplyDeleteLauren woke up in a dark,echoey,quiet,muddy and freaky well.Lauren was awfully terrified because she was scared of the dark.
ReplyDeletesuddenly Isabella tuned and saw a gigantic grizzly beer. She was petrified.
ReplyDeleteWhen Rosie was walking in the scary forest. She fell into a dark hole and got up to see what was around her. It was a door, Rosie tried to open it but it was locked.
ReplyDeleteWhile Lauren was on the farm she spotted a dark and deep well she went near it and dropped her watch down the well and she tried to get it but fell in the well
ReplyDeleteThe forest was eerie but you could hear the birds sing.The trees were shaking side to side and almost dancing, twigs were falling off
ReplyDeleteAs he was walking he saw a bunch of leaves, which were covering a hole. Then he fell into the dark hole.
ReplyDeletesuddenly the Lauren heard a noise behind her she turned around she saw a dinosaur she gasped her hands went on her check and her moth dropped down
ReplyDeleteWhat's there?! Can I read more?!
DeleteAs Isabella crept into the old quiet museum. Isabella had brown hair, she is 18 years old, a pink dress and she is angry all the time, with a pink coat
ReplyDeleteepic, awesome
ReplyDeletewas it good ?
it looks good.
we love reading and i think you are too.
good job, you must be great readers
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This week we have been writing an adventure in super sentence .
ReplyDeleteThe next day Max was digging a hole that Leeds to a cave and Clare quickly followed Max. Clare tripped over one of the rocks and lost Max -he was only getting a juicy , dinosaur bone. Clare slowly got on her hands and knees and was scared.she thought Max would come back do you.
Swinging from side to side quickly a boy eating monkey suddenly dropped his banana. He was about to pick it up but he glanced slyly at Jacob and licked his lips.
ReplyDelete" come on come on!" Shouted Kyle. "I see light, come on!" They found a place that was really light and shared some chocolate.
ReplyDeleteThese few week's we have been righting a story that happened underground because our topic is about underground and in my story there is a girl called Rosie and she is in terrible danger because this monster looks like a Crocker dale with spikes on his back and blood on his teeth also he eats' anyone that go underground and last he is a huge and plump and it's been amazing because we can us our imagination and that's really helping us to plan our super sentence. In super sentence we talk with the teacher about what we need to do in our sentence so when we go off to do our sentence we do draft , redraft and then final so in our draft we go rong.
ReplyDeletey My faviroute bits from my story .
ReplyDeleteShe got sucked down the chocolate fountain
All around her was glitter and the walls were made from jewels .
Suddenly she got put in a cave by a pale shadow .
I was having a brilliant , fantastic , amazing adventure
On wendesday we had a planned our new story and it's cand of like our old story but mr linton let us do our own setting and charter and on Thursday we did our new story in our purple book and then mr linton but some music on so we could stay focuse on our work and that really help us because we hand really loverly and neat handwrighting also really good storys.
ReplyDeletemine was about a boy called edward and he fulls down a hole and meets a vimpire in the hole and he is gonna kill edward and a girl edward friend pulls edward out of danger and the hole.
They were both running as fast as a cheetah with hair flowing on the wind both panting as they sprinted along ! Then they stopped in amazement as they got closer to the flashing light !
ReplyDelete" Oh it's just a lamppost and after all that fuss " said Tom
" It's not just any old lamppost I saw it when I entered the cave " replied jamilia .
"If you saw it on the way here that means we've found the entrance ! Shouted Tom
They both hugged each other with a beam that was reaching their ears !
Hope you like my super sentence ! :)